英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作得分亮點(diǎn)在哪？
1. 改變句子的開(kāi)頭方式,不是一味地都是主語(yǔ)開(kāi)頭,接著是謂語(yǔ)、賓語(yǔ),最后再加一個(gè)狀語(yǔ)�？梢园褷钫Z(yǔ)置于句首,或用分詞作狀語(yǔ)等。試比較:
(原文) My brother and I went to the cinema by bicycle the other day.
(修正) The other day my brother and I went to the cinema by bicycle.
(原文) The young man couldn’t help crying when he heard the bad news.
(修正) Hearing the bad news, the young man couldn’t help crying.
2. 在整篇文章中,避免只使用一兩個(gè)句式,要靈活運(yùn)用諸如強(qiáng)調(diào)句、主從復(fù)合句、分詞短語(yǔ)、倒裝句、省略句等。例如:
(1)強(qiáng)調(diào)句
(原文) The dog has saved my little sister bravely.
(修正) It is the dog that has saved my little sister bravely.
(2)主從復(fù)合句
(原文) We had to stand there to catch the offender.
(修正) What we had to do was to stand there, trying to catch the offender.
(3)分詞短語(yǔ)、由with或without引導(dǎo)的短語(yǔ)
(原文) The driver escaped and didn’t stop, he left the old man lying on the road.
(修正) The driver escaped without stopping, leaving the old man lying on the road.
(4)倒裝句
(原文) I went to bed at 11:30.
(修正) Not until 11:30 did I go to bed.
(5)省略句
(原文) While you are crossing the street, you should be careful.
(修正) While crossing the street, you should be careful.
3. 通過(guò)分句和合句,增強(qiáng)句子的連貫性和表現(xiàn)力。例如:
(原文) He stopped us an hour ago. He made us catch the next offender.
(修正) He stopped us half an hour ago and made us catch the next offender.
(原文) We had a short rest. Then we began to play happily. We sang and danced.
(修正) After a short rest, we had great fun singing and dancing.
4. 注意連接詞與句子的運(yùn)用。
以2001年高考作文為例,在信的開(kāi)頭,可加上“You want to know something about what is going on in schools in China?”這句話起承上啟下的作用,使文章過(guò)渡自然;再如,用“What was worse?”引出減負(fù)前,晚上還要做作業(yè),就寢時(shí)間11:30等要點(diǎn)。又如,“Now I have more free time...” 可引出減負(fù)后的情況。另外,在信的結(jié)尾,可用“How about you? I’m looking forward to hearing from you.”來(lái)自然地結(jié)束這封信。
5. 使用過(guò)渡詞語(yǔ)。
寫(xiě)好了每個(gè)句子,并不一定就是一篇好文章,因?yàn)樽鳛橐黄恼?還必須行文連貫。那么,如何使文章行文連貫?zāi)?這就要求我們?cè)诮M成篇章時(shí),要用好過(guò)渡性詞語(yǔ),過(guò)渡性詞語(yǔ)就像是我們組裝機(jī)械時(shí)使用的潤(rùn)滑劑一樣,起著潤(rùn)滑的作用。常用的過(guò)渡詞語(yǔ)主要有:
并列遞進(jìn):and, also, as well as, besides, what’s more, furthermore, moreover, etc.
轉(zhuǎn)折:but, yet, however, although, nevertheless, in spite of, after all, etc.
因果:because, as, for, since, for this reason, because of, so, therefore, thus, as a result, etc.
對(duì)比:or, otherwise, like, unlike, on the contrary, while, on the other hand, instead of, etc.
總結(jié):in all, in brief, on the whole, in short, in general, in one word, etc.
總之,要使文章的層次高,可讀性強(qiáng),考生應(yīng)增加些較高級(jí)的詞匯與復(fù)雜的結(jié)構(gòu),并運(yùn)用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞和復(fù)合句,只有這樣,才能在考試中取得理想的成績(jī)。